The document below details some of what students need to know to prosper in Parnassus. Click on the images to return to class or home pages.

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1 & 2

· Off Topic
· Soap Box lecture
· "I"
· Argues against writer's position
· Teacher lecture
· Testimonials
· Defining of Terms
· Major grammar problems
· Brevity
· Summary
· No analysis
· Inaccuracies

7

· More fluid in style
· Sections insightful
· Often one section well developed by student affected by time
· Clear or implied thesis
o Tied to general intent of question
· Attempts more difficult tasks
· Sense of completion

3 & 4

· Listers & labelers
· Pointless allusion
· Believe LANG test is same as LIT test
· Paraphrasing through over quoting (i.e. long passages)
· Limited task (i.e. diction only)
· Proving the obvious
· Poor analogies
· "obviously", 2nd person
· colloquial diction "even"
· Clichés ("makes you stop and wonder")
· Implied analysis, but inadequate
· Funnel opening
· Immature focus
· No sense of completion

8

· Strong sense of control-organization
· Insightful (often tied to human condition)
· Mature in style and vocabulary
· Tight link of support (text references) to author's intent.

5 & 6

· Inconsistent-but adequate
· Less difficult concepts (e.g. diction - rather than P. O. V., symbolism, syntax)
· Linear in organization
· (Step by step) Laborious
· Rigid organization
· Occasional insight
· Limit thesis (often 3 parts)
· Summary conclusion
· "Once over lightly"
· Lacks "voice"

9

· Magical at times
· Attempts more challenging concepts (i.e. figurative lang., symbolism, extended metaphor, organization, pacing, narrative strategies)
· Mature beginnings
· Takes risks - always under control.

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